'reducing rubbish' articles

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Mrs Fiddlesticks

Joined: 02 Nov 2004
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 08 8:16 am Post subject: 'reducing rubbish' articles
I wrote a series of articles for the parish mag - I've reworked them to be less 'local' and wondered if DS would like them. They're in a short series. Here's what the first page looks like! Click to download file

Fee

Joined: 21 Mar 2005
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 08 8:35 am Post subject:
Very good

marigold

Joined: 02 Sep 2005
Posts: 12458
Location: West Sussex

Posted: Sat Aug 30, 08 8:54 am Post subject:
Excellent! Can I make a teeny suggestion? If you changed "4 bin bags..." to (say) "4 fat bin bags..." it would fit the 10 green bottles tune better . Or "4 big bin bags..." . Just a thought .

Mrs Fiddlesticks

Joined: 02 Nov 2004
Posts: 10460

Posted: Sat Aug 30, 08 9:03 am Post subject:

marigold wrote:

Excellent! Can I make a teeny suggestion? If you changed "4 bin bags..." to (say) "4 fat bin bags..." it would fit the 10 green bottles tune better

. Or "4 big bin bags..." . Just a thought

depends how you sing it

with a long stress on the 4 it does work (but I'm not musical so.. If the editors want it and are musical they can edit it as they wish

)

marigold

Joined: 02 Sep 2005
Posts: 12458
Location: West Sussex

Posted: Sat Aug 30, 08 9:07 am Post subject:

Mrs Fiddlesticks wrote:

marigold wrote:

Excellent! Can I make a teeny suggestion? If you changed "4 bin bags..." to (say) "4 fat bin bags..." it would fit the 10 green bottles tune better

. Or "4 big bin bags..." . Just a thought

depends how you sing it

with a long stress on the 4 it does work (but I'm not musical so.. If the editors want it and are musical they can edit it as they wish

)

I'm not musical either, so my suggestion might sound awful to the tuneful types

. Look forward to seeing the rest of the articles.

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